Work

Right. So I've placed a short work I've been toying with on my DA account. If anyone would care to read it, or perhaps has some constructive criticism, it would be greatly appreciated. I've really had some fun writing this one. It felt so much more like I was quickly writing down a story I was being told than making one up. I'm sure that I'll alter it a bit, and give it a little polish before I submit it for publishing, but I'm giving it a bit of time to age and ferment before I take it up again and butcher it. All writing needs time to cool before rewriting.
In either case, I appreciate any help and hope you enjoy this as yet untitled work.
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